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Deviousness `anmari has been spreading her infectious positivity throughout our community for over 6 years. Throughout this time Ana has been at the core of all things devious, passionately developing an eclectic gallery, helping organise devmeets, participating in chat events and also recently completed dedicating her time as a Community Volunteer. We are absolutely delighted to bestow the Deviousness Award for May 2013 to `anmari, congratulations! Read More
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im not best either but i guess i do know some thing xD?
I really only need it on the neck and up.
I think I'm doing fine on back legs |3
So hey gurl, I am writing a story. Rough draft excerpt is on my page, wanna read and possibly give critique?
*Is desperately lonely and just wants some acknowledgment
Of course. I'll try to give it one, may not be the best but... >w>.... I'll try
You had good word choice and everything. (sorry, this might be a short critique since there wasn't much that I can talk about)
There are a few things that I would change, like when you were describing yourself.
Try going into more detail with it, it makes the readers able to imagine it better.
I noticed you used the word 'and' a lot. Try just using commas in a few areas if it makes sense.
Other than that, this is pretty good.
I hope this helps >w>'